Paper 1, Question 2

 

The famous entrepreneur, Richard Branson’s purpose of the text is to write an open-letter to anyone who may be reading. He talks about happiness and his own first hand experiences in contrast with society's popular beliefs. Due to him giving his own account of happiness the text throughout is very formal and has personal references to the writer’s own life. This makes the reader be able to connect to the information in the letter much more closely and create imagery of the scenes being described. 

In the beginning of the letter, the writer starts off in second person perspective and gives a piece of advice which is targeted towards the reader. The writers does this by using phrases such as “help you” and “be yours.” The reader’s attention is then immediately grabbed and the letter feels like it was written to them by someone personal or close to them. Branson then switches in the following second paragraph to first person perspective and the writer gives his own personal account of hardships he has faced. “I’ve cheated death” “failed in business” “loved ones pass away.” The writer is incorporating pathos and uses multiple emotional stories in order to persuade the reader to trust his advice since he has went through a lot that would alter his happiness. 


An encouraging tone is established and therefore contributes to the advice being said in the letter. The author uses words and phrases like “Stop and breathe” “Be healthy” and “appreciate the moment.” This ties back to the writer connecting with the reader on a personal level by telling them what is best to achieve happiness. It would come off as credible because of all the writer’s own past experiences.”I speak from experience.” He uses informal language which makes the text more casual and spontaneous. While reading, it feels like a conversation being held or listening to a speech. This makes the text easy to follow and more likely to connect while reading with what is being said. 


The format of the text is a letter and is opened with “Dear Stranger” and then at the end “Happy regards, Richard Branson.” The text is written as Richard Branson’s own life story and each paragraph is grouped under his own different ideas. It focuses mostly on common misconceptions by society of what exactly happiness is. All the author’s ideas are organized well and are easy to follow along with while reading and you can tell what he is talking about. 


Imagery is utilized to further provide the readers with a familiar atmosphere. The writer says to truly achieve happiness you need to “be in the moment.” He then gives his own personal reference from his life of times he has felt the most happy. “Flamingos fly across” “new grandchild” “looking up at the stars.” These are his own moments from his life, but reading makes you feel like you are witnessing the scenes being described as well and then brings you closer to the text. He uses more common occurrences that others often take for granted that have stuck with him. “Smell of rain,” or “ripple of a wave.” This shows that even the little things that occur should make you want to stop time just to witness. 


The language  is more emotional and personal towards the author. Due to him referencing his life it creates credibility and therefore exhibits ethos. Due to him living an “extraordinary life” he then is able to contrast common people's beliefs about how they think happiness is due to a lot of money. He gives his own personal experiences of hardships he has faced and how it has made him come to his own realization. He wants to write a letter to give everyone reading advice on how to change their mindset and realization of the true meaning of happiness. 



Comments

  1. Hey Mallory,

    AO1:
    For AO1 I’m going to give you a total of 3 marks. You had a clear understanding of the text and referred to characteristic features such as those buzzwords like ‘imagery’, ‘second perspective’, ‘first person’, ‘informal’ which is good to have as that boosts up your score even more. I just feel like to improve it better, you could’ve added more buzzwords explaining specific words or phrases such as a popular one being used was repetition that has been used multiple times throughout the passage.

    AO3:
    For first bullet point I give you 3 marks because your structure and your analysis was clear and was easy to flow and easy to read off of. I liked how each paragraph had its own personal topic which again made it easier to follow and understand.

    For the second bullet point I give you 3 marks. Even though you explained structure, form, and language analysis I just felt like you could’ve added more in your last paragraph about explaining the language such as adding verbs, nouns, adjectives, idioms, personification, rhetorical devices or rhetorical questions.

    For the third bullet point I give you 2 marks. The reason why is because this bullet point focuses on how the writer’s letter can include the audience. You mostly focused on what the writer himself was feeling, which is good, but could’ve also added what the audience/reader might’ve felt. There were some places you talked about audience, I just felt like if you talked about the audience more it could’ve raised your grade up.

    For the last bullet point I give you 3 marks. You had a great deal with quotation marks and I liked how you restated or gave examples and went in-depth of your explanation towards why you used those quotations as it further boosted up your score.

    Total: 14/25 Great job.

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  2. Hey Mallory,

    AO1: For this section I thought you did pretty good and I would give you 4 marks. It was clear that you understood the text and the specific characteristics of it. You also did well tracing it all back to the audience and understanding why the writer wrote the way he did. This was good writing.

    AO3: For this section I would give you 14 marks. You did well analyzing both the form, structure and language of the letter. You pulled good evidence from the text to support your claims the language that you used throughout your writing was somewhat sophisticated. You analayze Richard Branson’s choices well and this was good writing.

    18/25

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